spin cycle
Poetry
by
casanovaah
Oh god, Foreign, like a rabbit from a hat, she moved her ears slightly, © casanovaah
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Silver
3,896 points
on 12/06/07 at 11:47 PM
you pretty much got it exactly right nancy. and thanks i didnt catch the spelling error.Silver
3,101 points
on 12/05/07 at 11:18 PM
This poem has such a good rhythm.. it's so snappy and fresh.. it's like the jazz of poetry. on first reading it - i thought the ending fell a bit flat after that great set up - but then i thought maybe slowing it down at the end is fitting - a reflection of the whirlwind romance that transforms into something more routine and monotonous? Or did i miss the point?
Just one thing - foreign is spelled wrong.
Silver
3,896 points
on 12/02/07 at 07:24 PM
thanks. i didnt catch that i forgot the T.on 12/01/07 at 07:00 PM
first stanza, "scrips" is missing a t. Should be "scripts". Wonderful otherwise though.Elite Blue
96,520 points
on 11/26/07 at 05:22 PM
well done.Add a comment